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Need Critique

Postby Karisee » Fri Sep 16, 2011 12:12 pm

Hi, I've been working one some things lately and would really like some advice on how to improve. The short below isn't finished but I would still like some critique.

I also have a blog if you want to take a look.

Thank you.
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Re: Need Critique

Postby Charles » Fri Sep 16, 2011 10:45 pm

Hi Karisee.

Overall you did a good job with this film but I see areas that can be improved upon. In certain parts, such as the beginning where the central character is moving about in bed, you handled the subtle posing very well. After that, the staging and composition of some of the scenes could've been approached more effectively. For example where the little doll starts to move about. I think a closer view of that would've been more effective after an establishing shot of some kind. Also, the animation is a bit choppy and abrupt, but your poses and expressions are good.

It's a nice story, I like the idea that you convey.

Hope this helps. Thanks for posting your video here. It was fun watching it.

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Re: Need Critique

Postby Karisee » Sat Sep 17, 2011 9:33 am

Thanks for that Charles. I'll work a bit more on the animation to make it smoother and redo some scenes. I really appreciate that you took the time to respond, so thank you again.
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